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atomic lemon drops #6: barbershop

01/01/13 , , , , , , ,

most places that you’ll visit discourage thievery but it’s kinda encouraged in the world of art.  in fact, there’s a saying that goes something like “good artists borrow. great artists steal.”  in this case, stealing isn’t as simple as just taking.  you have to analyze your fellow artist (“the mark”), find out what she/he does well  (“the prize”) and make it your own (“success”).  it’s a great exercise that adds to your repertoire by increasing your knowledge of the craft.

in a writing workshop, i had to write a poem copying the writing style of one of my classmates.  one thing i noticed about her was that she liked to use extended sentences, similes & metaphors that might spill into different lines & thoughts.  in spots, they let her poetry feel alive as ideas/readings would shift constantly.  none of that really flowed with my writing at the time so it was a fun challenge putting the poem below together.  send any questions/comments you have about it and i’ll respond below.  and happy new year:

Barbershop

I know it’s a good day when
the sun shines both sides of the street
with light polish
like a boy buffing shoes for
the first time.  He made my walk so clean
I gave him a tip.
Don’t move your head. Not if you want
your line straight like sidewalks.

Jimmy told me this once.
That promise falls short
sometimes. You see it as
mistakes rush to dead ends
like gray scuffs on fresh Sundays.
He said this, eyes gone dim,
still clipping and snipping away
at growth. Cuts like these run
deeper than baby scars.

                              

previously in atomic lemon drops: grim reaper | dear leader | weekend in jamaica | rehearsal for “when doors slam shut a poem called lauryn

© Carlton Williams Jr. and atolemdro, 2012. Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this poem without express and written permission from this blog’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Carlton Williams Jr. and atolemdro with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

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